I finally got around to taking a look at it. I like the choice of music. However, it doesn't really fit the overall flow. That kind of underscore needs to really drive a piece. Try experimenting with more intercutting of scenes. Don't be afraid to experiment with your camera either. What you may consider a junk shot can break something up for 10-12 frames at times when the music dictates it. This piece "feels" like a high action type of sequence. I like that. Let the music dictate your cuts. Make them quicker. Try "metric cutting". 10 frame 10 frame 20 frame 10 frame 20 frame stuff. It might be useful. Also, quick pans of the camer can help. Don't be afraid to use "unsteady camera" shots too. The jittery frame can sometimes add to the excitement of the moment. Look at all the "bad camera work" at the opening of Gladiator.